Creepypasta Reviews - Shantae Passion

Creepypasta Reviews - Shantae Passion

Greetings everybody, HG is back with another blog. As you might have guessed, my previous blog has drained me a bit, mostly due to how long it was. Not to mention a bug infestation in my house, so it took a good few days before I could get my second blog out. But with that out of the way, onto this new series.

Now, I'm sure if you're reading this you know how reviews in general work. But as for these reviews, here's a quick rundown.

1. Each creepypasta I review is ranked on the plot, the content and if it's disturbing or not, as well as the writing. But that does mean with these broad topics, I can go into other parts of the creepypasta and how it's good or bad. Similar to the style of AniMat's reviews, just replace animated movies with creepypastas.
2. Each one of those categories plus a few of my own thoughts will go into a score out of 10 at the end.
3. Also, as an added bonus I will voice my thoughts on whether it should be on the Creepypasta Wiki or not. Even if they aren't on that wiki. (Also, this is being dictated solely by the quality itself, not by their blacklists and whatnot. As a result, I wouldn't say that my thoughts mean you should post it there if it isn't there already, and overall you should just take this with a pinch of salt)
4. As always, this is my opinion on these stories. And I mean no hostility to the writers of these stories, in the event that a story doesn't turn out good, you can always improve. Also, this is going to go through the entire story in detail. So if you don't want any of these stories I review to be spoiled, I suggest reading those first.

But with that said, let's take a look at our first story, named Shantae Passion. Now, I will start off this review by saying this. I haven't played much of the Shantae series, there are a few basic, general bits and pieces I know from the get-go, but with the complicated story and gameplay elements, that's beyond my knowledge. But with that said, let's delve into the first of my reviews.

The Plot

One issue that I've seen with so many video game creepypastas, is that the plot just simply isn't that strong, or falls under the same premise constantly. And I'm gonna be brutally honest here, I thought it was going to be the same way when I first started, though thankfully it didn't go in the direction I assumed it was gonna go.

First impressions aside, this story revolves around the author named Joey, who tells us that he had grown a liking to the Shantae series and how it has turned into his guilty pleasure. With that, I believe that you can see why I was getting rather worried in the first few sentences, as so many video game creepypastas start out like this, and immediately go downhill into a clichéd train-wreck. Some of which I have already talked about in my previous blog, like The Princess Is Not In Another Castle.

Thankfully it turns its attention to his friend Gordon, who had been making fan-made games based off of the Shantae series, as he has been practicing with the Shantae games before going on to making his own games with their own IPs. But Joey reveals that Gordon had been making rather dark games, and he soon sends him one of a "Fan Mini-Game" detailing a "What-If?" scenario that could've happened in the series.

Now I'm not going to lie, at this point I was honestly rather glad that this wasn't one of those "sketchy ROM hack but downloaded it anyway" stories, I've seen those so many times and almost none of them get it right. But here there is some semblance of sense going on here. However, that doesn't mean that this story's plot didn't have any faults. Now, I wanna reserve most of this for the second section. But there really isn't much evolution in how disturbing the content gets, as there's really only one thing that happens, and then, for the most part, nothing else happens afterward.

Now, of course, you can do much worse, in fact, I talked about Disturbing Pokémon ROM in my Top 10 Worst Plot-Twists list, which I'd say is the perfect example of how bad that sort of premise can get. But even then, that premise in general almost never works out unless you're a really good writer. Also, this is kind of a nitpick but, the mention of Castlevania really confuses me. Now, again it's better than what it could've been as it was just for a description, but even then you could've just gone with the "Combusted into flames" bit from earlier. With creepypastas, most of the time you don't need to go too descriptive. Hell, most of the time it's better if you don't, as it can break the immersion.

Though there is one thing that I will admit, kinda gets on my nerves. 

With that said, due to this story being rather short there's not much else to say about the plot, it could've been a lot better. But it is also the perfect refresher when it comes to overly cliché'd plots as well, even if it did have a few in there. And if we're gonna be honest, some plots are the type where you're bound to hit a few here and there.

The Content

Now let's get into what actually happened with the climax, as this is where I can go no holds barred with the content that some of these creepypastas have. Yet this is also the place where I would suggest you reading them first if you're interested, because, with these kinds of stories, you kinda need to go in blindly in order to get scared of them a lot of the time. Not all of the time, yes, but most of the time.

With that out of the way, there's this scene where Shantae has completely gone missing and there's a conversation within Scuttle Town, and again I'm not familiar with any of this. So if there is an inconsistency with the games, I wouldn't know. And Shantae's sister Sky decides to go searching for her, and upon discovering some of the main villain's henchmen, she discovers Shantae, naked and nailed to a cross.

Now, there are quite a few problems that I see with this. The first one is actually one that immediately popped into my head in my first reading, as immediately after this the author goes right into the censorship and nothing else, almost as if the protagonist, Joey, didn't care. Which is the last thing you want when designing what is supposed to be an unsettling moment. I know that it does say that he shared the same shock as Sky did, but that doesn't really mean much. You could instead go through their train of thought as they see this, and their genuine concern for their friend being shown there, not just at the end.

Secondly, it just feels really forced along with the calibration sequence. Which is a problem with a bunch of video game creepypastas, let alone creepypastas in general. And it's no different here. As it seems like the whole thing was put in here only for shock value and nothing else, there really wasn't any other meaning behind it. And while it did somewhat elevate the plot, it still could've been much better if this wasn't there or traded off for something else.

And thirdly, while this is more of a personal note, it doesn't really shock me all that much. And no, not just because of the overdone torture/death of fictional characters in video game creepypastas. See, I'm agnostic. So none of the religious aspects of this story has any affect on me. And even without that, as I said earlier, game characters dying in creepypastas is done far too much. And doing that alone isn't, and wasn't, scary.

Though I will admit, this isn't scary. But it also isn't laughably scary either. Like say, "AND THEN HYPER-REALISTIC SKELETONS AMBUSHED ME WHILE SHANTAE DIED!!!" Which, stories like that sadly do exist, minus Shantae being a part of it.

The Writing

Now, with this section I will say right now, with some stories there might not be a whole lot to say. Mostly when the grammar is perfectly fine, and overall really refined spelling. And that begs the question, will this story be one of those?

Most of the time, yes. However, there's one issue that I quickly noticed the first time I read the story. Which is another rookie mistake when it comes to writing a creepypasta. The story is written as if the reader knows everything the author is talking about. I do know that this story is most likely to appeal to those who have played the Shantae series. But, not explaining what the game is or how the game works could easily turn those unfamiliar with the series off.

Not to mention the fact that due to the fact that the reader doesn't understand most of the plot, they can't be anywhere near as scared as someone who's played the entirety of the Shantae series. And that's the last thing you want to happen with your story. As sometimes, not only can you explain how the game works really well, but you can actually get into the games you're talking about. As I will admit, after reading the NES Godzilla Creepypasta, I have been playing the game it was based on recently.

On a different note, this may be a pet peeve of mine, but the main character also points out that his friend Gordon made these fan-games so well that even the official creators were impressed. Which, I'm gonna be honest, I am positive wouldn't happen. If anything it feels more like a self-insert, and even if this did happen, I feel like the developers would be more interested in getting him involved with development. I mean, I may not be a business genius, but that does seem like a logical conclusion to make.

But with that said, it's just a pet peeve of mine so I won't hold it against the story too much. But even so, I do feel like they should've explained the game better, so I and a few fellow readers didn't get lost.

Overall

I'm not going to lie, I felt like I wanted to go full-on harsh at times when writing this. But considering that from what the author's activity tells me, this was the first creepypasta he ever wrote. Which I will admit, is exactly why I chose to do this as my first one to review. As it gets a few things right, but also a rather large amount that needs work.

As for an overall perspective, I'd say that this is the perfect example of a mediocre creepypasta story. Not close to being good, not close to being bad. The best way I can put it is that this story may screw up, but at least it could be considered competent. It isn't bad nor laughable, but it doesn't excel is anything or take a new path. If anything it's one creepypasta easily forgotten.

As for the question I like to ask at the end of a review, there's a simple answer I can give.

Should this creepypasta belong on the Creepypasta Wiki?

Now, I said above that even if the story isn't from the Creepypasta Wiki, I can still add this in. Just to give a little bit of context. And does this belong there? Well, not exactly. It takes many different clichés that most readers are just tired of seeing, the story can be confusing, and it just isn't that scary. Overall, just bland.

This isn't anywhere near my worst list of creepypastas, hell it's not the worst Shantae creepypasta I've read (Which is Shantae 64: The Unreleased Sequel), but it needs work. And if the writer of this story just to happens to be reading this, assuming you still want to write one of these, I'm sure with these tips in mind among others, you can make a really good story.

-The Plot (5.5/10)

-The Content (3/10)

-The Writing (6.5/10)

-Overall (5/10)

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Hey everyone, thanks for sticking around until the very end! Did you like this start on my new series, have any criticisms, or have an idea for a future creepypasta to review? Let me know in the comments! I hope to keep you guys entertained with these. Until next time!

Links:

http://someordinarygamers.wikia.com/wiki/Shantae_Passion

HG's Top 10 Worst Creepypasta Plot Twists

Welcome to my first blog everybody, about time huh? Anyways, anyone who's been keeping in touch with me lately knows what I've been obsessed with, creepypastas. If you've clicked on this I'm pretty sure you know what a creepypasta is, and while they can be done very well. There is, unfortunately, a ton of other stories that fall short of its expectations.

Most people have plenty of stories in mind that fit into this category; Jeff the Killer, Sonic.exe, Clockwork: Your Time Is Up, etc. And one fault that could result in a story to go downhill, is a poorly executed plot twist. Now, while it is well known that plot twists can help radically change the story. And there are some plot twists in this genre of short stories that do the term justice, but for every good one, there is... countless bad ones. And today, we'll be counting down some of the worst.

Keyword being some, as I haven't read each and every creepypasta on the planet. Reading each and every one of them is like trying to walk around the entire globe with prosthetic legs. Although, I do want to give credit to my friend Masta, for helping me get some extra candidates for this countdown. As for the list, there are some rules to go along with it before we begin.

1. I am aware that the YouTuber and creepypasta reader/critic HoodoHoodlumsRevenge has tackled this sort of topic before in a rather well-done video, which you can see right here. In fact, he's the reason I'm doing this in the first place, but out of respect for him and his list. I'll only allow only 1 of his own Plot Twists on that list will be allowed on this list. Plus it helps keep this, relatively fresh. So Hoodo, in the unlikely event that you have stumbled across this, keep in mind I have no intention of ripping off your list. I simply want to expand upon it.
2. This is mostly tackling plot twists that are either; Not built-up, something that the reader already predicted, ones that have been done over-and-over/poorly executed concepts or are just downright ridiculous.
3. No Trollpastas. These are stories that are trying to be serious, not ones that are attempting to be as absolutely terrible as humanly possible. However, stories on the TP wiki under "Deletion Log Refugees" and "Pasta Trying To Be Good But Sucks Enough To Be A Troll" definitely qualify.
4. These are simply my opinions, if you disagree with either my thoughts on these stories or my thoughts on these plot twists, that's perfectly fine. And you're free to discuss your thoughts in the comments below.
5. As this is quite obvious, a spoiler alert is mandatory here. But with the subject that we're talking about here, I may or may not have saved you.
6. And most importantly, I mean no hostility to any of the authors of these stories. Everyone starts writing somewhere, and you can only improve with each work you write. I'm just giving constructive criticism, and I'm sure you can improve and make great stories in the future.
7. Any grammar mistakes from these stories will be bold and italicized 

But with that said, it's time to rip these plot twists, and stories in general, a new one.

10.

Terraria: The Stone Pentagram - Summoning SATANSPAWN

Yeah, we're starting off on a high note, aren't we? Now, one thing about creepypastas that is universally known by now, whenever there's a haunted game story or demon-possessed games. 9 times out of 10 the end result will be an either cliché'd mess or just an all around flawed story. This is a good example of this. Forced and contrived storytelling is one of the words I could describe the story, but that'd be too easy. But back on topic.

This story centers around the author, Matt Tabin's experience with a pirated game of Terraria, which as a little side-note, the only time time the author reveals his full name is when the game actually deduces his name in which he says, and I quote - "made me shit a brick right there".

Now, you'd think with a scary story, a remark like that would be something that would backtrack from making the writer feel crept out. Also, the author was "too lazy" to buy the game, even though it would take much more effort to pirate the game. But back to the story, once the author gets the game the computer starts acting unnaturally before opening it and starting a new world.

Then it starts reusing the clichés as "scary stuff" happens, before the author finds a chest with one of the contents being the Stone Pentagram. Once getting a Terra Blade, he summons "SATANSPAWN."

Now, why is this bad? Because it really comes out of nowhere, and not in a good way. As there wasn't anything foreshadowing Satan getting put into this story. And after some events that would be impossible within the game's script (Taking 90871 damage per second despite when starting a new world you only have 100 health) the author's character is eventually killed by the monster. 

After his computer's tower is, I kid you not, set on fire, the author tries to go to sleep. Until the same monster suddenly enters the real world and kills the author, with his final vision being an old man that comes out of nowhere with the same stone pentagram around his neck. Afterward, he reveals that he was writing this as an undead demon and he's warning you about the pirated game.

Now there is, of course, several questions to be had over this. How does this creature manage to get through the computer and attack someone in real life? Why would a demon want to warn you? And even if this was a legit cry out for you not to play this, why would he be so casual? These questions and many more puzzling facts about this ending overall just made it a confusing mess from the moment it reared its head.

Why is it only number 10? Because if I'm gonna be honest, it may be confusing. But it's also rather laughable. In a sort of so bad it's good way, in comparison to the rest of the story. And it at least has more creativity than the remaining 9 places on this list. But even so, that still can't save this bizarre plot twist.

9.

Nostalgia Critic's Lost Review/AVGN ET Atari 2600 - Suicide

Suicide is one of the most common plot twists in creepypasta works, and it seems that this is one that never seems to work well. One of the most well-known examples is Blood Whistle, a very melodramatic and drawn-out story that eventually ends in the suicide of the main character due to playing a Super Mario Bros. 3 Hack, with his friend even saying that it was a scary one. That kind of nonsense.

In fact, for the suicide entry, I was originally gonna include Mega Man 2: Ladder to Hell, where it's revealed in the last paragraph that the entire story was a suicide note. Despite the entire thing barely having anything to do with suicide in the first place, and it only happened when his digitized brother (Who somehow managed to program his consciousness into an NES cartridge, it's never explained) commanded his brother to kill himself due to his depression he had. But as much as I wanted to bring that up, out came these two stories.

You may be wondering why I decided to put these two together, but the thing is. They are both the same story. It's not just inspiration for these two, they are exact duplicates.

Both revolve around two people who watch the newest episodes of their web show, and are about to type in a comment when they come across a comment from a user almost identical to the official YouTuber's names, only with a slight change (For example, JamesNNintendoNerd instead of JamesNintendoNerd) so they aren't the exact same.

Rather than dismissing it as a fake account like any normal person would (After all, I'm sure we've all heard of those fake Markiplier charity accounts so fake AVGN accounts is almost a guarantee), they instead check out the channel to find one video of a review that AVGN and Nostalgia Critic vowed never to do, Barney's Great Adventure in the case of the former and ET for the ladder. Both are out of character as they start reviewing, showing only depressed emotion towards what they are doing. And honestly, I would be too if I was in these creepypastas.

Once the review is over they immediately start destroying their own property, and in Nostalgia Critic's case he starts killing the crew of Channel Awesome, both bringing up COPS for no reason. Before both AVGN and Nostalgia Critic kill themselves with a real pistol. And then afterward, the video is removed and both channels are wiped from YouTube.

What really helps kill this is the reactions from the author, it is honestly just as melodramatic as Blood Whistle. As they are just absolutely horrified and asking "Why would the audience be subjected to this??" and "Now I know why he never reviewed this and never will..."

Also, at the very end, both protagonists just go back to watching their actual channels like nothing happened, snatching any possible tension that the reader had felt beforehand and squandered it. See, when it comes to writing these kinds of stories, you need to keep the author feel impacted by what he saw, questioning what he thought before and thinking that this could have actually caused the death to those involved. Of course, that still doesn't save the fact that James and Doug are both still alive and kicking to this day, but you get my point.

Now if I had to choose one that's worse I'd have to choose ET Atari 2600, mostly because of the AVGN Movie debunking this more than it already was when it was first published. But even so, when it comes to these plot twists. I'm sure nobody will disagree with me when I say, they're a shitload of fuck.

8.

Sakurai's Secret - Villager Killed Sakurai

Remember those "Killer Villager" memes that were made way back in 2013? They may have been rather amusing the first time I saw them, but they quickly grew stale for me. But the last thing I expected from this craze was a creepypasta going along with it. One that is attempting to be a serious creepypasta, instead of a trollpasta like I was hoping it would be.

This creepypasta centers around someone who was super anticipated for the newest Super Smash Bros. games, when he comes across a 3DS cartridge for it before it was officially released, with "Super Smash Bros. 4" written in sharpie. Which already hints at how cliché'd the story is. As when it comes to stories about haunted/hacked games, bizarre box-arts or names written in sharpie has really lost its luster.

Moving on, the player decided that he wanted to play Classic Mode and starts out as Mega Man, and once he completes all but the final stage, instead of getting greeted with Master Hand, he is instead greeted by, you guessed it, the Villager. And he quickly kills off Mega Man in the style of the usual haunted game stories, with just a mess of blood and guts.

One of the problems that many creepypasta writers don't seem to get with haunted games is that making an over-reliance on blood and gore doesn't make your story scarier. If anything it just makes the reader feel bored, especially if you are describing it in a large amount of detail. This creepypasta may have it toned down a notch compared to others, but it's still very noticeable.

Criticism aside, once Mega Man is killed off. The author decides to play as the Villager next and soon ends up killing the entire cast of playable characters, with another instance of relying too much on buckets of blood and guts. Eventually, he reaches the final boss, which is then revealed to be Masahiro Sakurai.

After some dialogue that I swear wouldn't be out of place in a Saturday Morning Cartoon, the two of them clash, with the end result being Villager decapitating Sakurai. Once the author attempts to log onto Miiverse to post what he witnessed, he gets news that Masahiro Sakurai has passed away and that Super Smash Bros. 4 would be delayed.

Now, I am aware that real-life people getting killed by a game are nothing new. Like, say, Grand Theft Auto San Andreas: Limited Edition, where Barack Obama dies once he's killed in an assassination attempt within the game. And of course, both are easily disprovable, and not just because of the obvious "It's impossible to kill someone through a video game." It's also easily disprovable as both are still alive and well. (And let's hope it stays that way)

Why did I choose this over SA: LE? Outside of the fact that Hoodo already brought this up in his list of Worst Plot-Twists, it's because of the fact that it at least didn't get the plot-twist out in such a poorly written, cheesy, and just plain terrible fashion.

Not to mention it didn't revolve around memes.

7.

BEN II - Jadusable Died. The End.

Remember when I said that I would include only one of the entries that Hoodo put on his list? Well, we've reached that point. Now, I am aware that this is most likely a SpinPasta, but if that's the case it is the worst SpinPasta I have ever read. Based on the story that never, ever needed any unofficial sequels whatsoever. Jadusable decides to play the haunted Majora's Mask cartridge for a second time, claiming I shit you not, "Alright. Haunted or not I will defeat you BEN!"

I may have said earlier that the dialogue in Sakurai's Secret was bad, but this is in a league of its own. It makes sitting through the entirety of this creepypasta just groan-worthy. To the point where whenever I see a quote I have to brace myself for what The Room of creepypastas would spit out next. I'm being genuine when I say this.

You never do that. Unless this is supposed to be a trollpasta, and even then it brings out a lot more pissed off looks than laughs. If you're gonna use dialogue for your story, make it realistic. Or at the very least reasonable. This sounds like it was ripped out of a shōnen anime, not even a good one either.

After Jadusable starts up the game, BEN immediately starts quoting Jeff the Killer for no reason whatsoever, only furthering the destruction of any semblance of tension within this story, which it barely had any, to begin with. After seeing another completely idiotic "GO TO SLEEP" reference, Jadusable heads to his Twitter to say that BEN is now free before getting in a car and driving off.

BEN responds by hacking his Twitter account and saying that he is going to die, before appearing in front of him while he's driving and saying one of the worst lines I've read in a creepypasta.

"HELLO ALEX OR SHOULD I SAY GOODBYE ALEX."

First off, creepypastas, where the dialogue is entirely written in all caps just, shouldn't have the right to be called a creepypasta at all. Secondly, that line would sound like something a comic relief villain would say, not something you should feel legitimately afraid of. And thirdly, how the hell is this supposed to be BEN?!

Like, for the love of god you could have just gone with the classic "You've met with a terrible fate haven't you..." It's a massive cliché sure, but at least it fits with the character we're talking about! And it fits much better than any "GO TO SLEEP" ever would, too.

And right after that poor excuse of a line, BEN hacks into Jadusable's car and drives him into a swimming pool, whereas quoted by the story, "ALEX DROWNED." Like I said, this story seems to be attempting to make BEN into a complete dunce rather than be a fully fledged-out sequel to the critically acclaimed story.

And then it simply ends with "Jadusable died. The end." Making the whole thing completely anti-climactic, and while this was a rather short creepypasta, it is an absolute middle finger throughout the entire thing. And the plot twist might as well be that same middle finger flicking you in the eye. 

Why did I choose this over Time-Travel Journal? Because honestly, that story barely had a plot, to start with. All I got from it was that it had a bunch of journals detailing some monster that kills people, that's it. On the other hand, BEN II has much more of a plot (Not like it means much, in all honesty as the plot still sucks) and therefore has a better resemblance of a twist, as absolutely off-the-wall the twist in question is.

It may only be Number 7 on this list, but that doesn't make it any more absurd. As for the story, all I can say to the author, for the lack of a better word.

You shouldn't have done that.

6.

Roblox: ? - ? Kills The Author

Now, I'll start this off by saying I don't ever remember playing Roblox, as it just wasn't my thing. But if any stories like this are accepted by the stance of the Roblox community, I'm sure even if Sandbox was the type of games I liked I never would've touched the game with a 10-foot pole. This story is just a jumbled mess of capitalization, shitty grammar to the point where it makes me question if the author doesn't have a grasp on the English language, and countless exclamation points from beginning to end. Not to mention it hilariously rips off Jeff is Back, which is already a terrible story, to begin with.

So this story starts out with a terrible cliché, where the author is practically getting on his hands and knees and begging you to believe that this story is true and it indeed happened to him, which if you can tell by the title of this segment alone is complete bullshit, but I'm getting ahead of myself. And it shows the author trying to buy a hat off of Roblox, which I assume is something you can do in the games, like I said I haven't played a second of it, before accidentally typing in ?.

Which, unless this guy has one of the most bizarre keyboards in the galaxy he'd have to be using the shift key in order to accidentally put in a ? otherwise, he'd just put in a slash. So already there's a plot-hole in the first few paragraphs, but there's more. He ends up finding a ? hat. And wouldn't you know he's able to get it for free (Which again, is a cliché that's been done so many times it's outright painful) and tries to put it on before he absolutely panics because it vanishes.

This is another major problem with the story, the author is such a gigantic baby about absolutely everything that it makes Tom from Sonic.exe look like King Leonidas. Like seriously, imagine if in Ben Drowned whenever BEN appeared Jadusable was all like "OH MY FUCKING GOD WHAT IS THIS STATUE WHY IS IT APPEARING!?!?!?!" That is pretty much what the author in this story is in a nutshell, panicking about every little thing and overall just a nuisance to deal with. You never want to create characters like that, if you want likable protagonists, make them act realistically to an issue and go from there.

Cripes, I haven't even gotten to the main plot of this story yet and it's already filled with tons of flaws. After that, he just completely forgets about it and it's never brought up again, making it seem as it all of that had no point whatsoever before joining a server. To which a user named "?" follows him there. He then says "Time to suffer" and runs up to the author's character and immediately kills it, with hyper-realistic blood spurting out of the character's corpse.

I'm sure even non-writers know this by now, but you should never use hyper-realistic blood in a serious matter no matter what the circumstance is. Unless your desire in life is to be laughed at, it might as well be making a death wish. Hell, even in trollpastas it's getting overused and just plain bad. Not in a so bad it's good way anymore either, rather in a so bad it's horrible way. In fact, you should never be over-reliant on buckets of blood at all. Can you still use it? Of course, just keep it low. Works like A Nightmare on Elm Street, heck even another creepypasta NES Godzilla still managed to use blood, but their horror was more focused on a psychological level. Which most people can agree is much more terrifying.

Hyper-realism should just never be used. Whether it be hyper-realistic blood or hyper-realistic eyes, never use it.

Back to the story, as if I keep pointing out how many flaws this story makes we'd be here for an eternity, the author leaves the game only to be greeted with a default Robloxian face with blood pouring out of his eyes, again with the over-reliance on gore. And the author attempts to shut his computer off in a panic. Of course, it doesn't work and in true to his character he completely flips his shit over it.

Afterward, he goes to sleep before having a nightmare about ? appearing out of nowhere, but the author wakes up before he "ciuld" finish the job. Because if there's one thing I've learned from terrible creepypastas is that some people just don't have the patience to proofread their own stories. And then he starts crying because of it like a wuss. Subsequently, he continues to play Roblox only for ? to continue following him, before a cutscene of them fighting played. The author's character was winning before ? stabs him and hyper-realistic blood spurts out.

And no that's not me repeating the same description for you guys, that's the story.

He is then taken to his friend's list where all of the characters have the same ? hat, before the game closes out. He soon reveals that he is typing this on word, then seconds later ? pops out of nowhere and kills the author with the totally legit death cry being " OH NO HE'S HERE PLEASE HELP ME GU SHHFGJTFHNVVGHKL LO HVDX. #/% g ft hhffgn, yyj I h"

First of all, that looks more like the writer of this story just pounding his forehead into his keyboard rather than an actual cry out. And secondly, he just said that he was typing this out on word a sentence ago! Why on Earth would the author put his death cry there rather than y'know, calling for help in the actual real-world like a normal person would! I'm pretty sure the police don't monitor each and every word document on the planet so that way they can see someone's cries for help there.

In fact, not only is it a why would he do this, but it's also how would he do this in the first place? If he is actually typing this out is he just all like "Oh my god I'm dying but I should still be typing some random keys into this word document!" So it's a nonsensical double whammy. And before you make the argument that it could be ? typing this out. The very last paragraph shows ? actually talking in a script format for some reason, and basically just spouts out an obligatory "YOU'RE NEXT!" Which is another cliché that is nowhere near scary or funny anymore, and instead just makes the reader roll his eyes upon seeing it before closing the tab.

So as you can see, this story is just in absolute shambles with the plot twist just absolutely wrecking the entire thing once it hits that point, not to mention it just throws logic out the window. And to be honest, after reading this plot twist it wasn't the only thing that was thrown out of a window.

5.

Mario Kart Black - Jacob Is Murdered By Mario

At the time of writing this, Mario Kart Black was the story that I read most recently. As a matter of fact, this one had to be squeezed in because of how recently I discovered this. And it was put in here for a reason, I really needed to talk about this, because holy hell was it terrible! I did figure out that this was gonna be a bad creepypasta in the very first paragraph, but I had no idea that it could get this atrocious. Consider this a jumbled cliché mess like the earlier entry but multiply the length by 10. And make it just that much more painful.

As for the plot, this centers around our two main protagonists, Sarah and Jacob (Which I'd like to point out are 17 and 21 respectively, yet the older one of the two still uses "chicken" as an insult) getting a bizarre Mario Kart game from Gamestop, called Mario Kart Black. And they claim that Nintendo has never made a Rated-M game despite the fact that Eternal Darkness existed (They helped "make" it considering they published it) among others.

But once they give it to the cashier, they manage to shoehorn in an overused cliché, where the cashier is scared about the game and practically begs the two to take it for free. I would explain how overused this is and how bad this is, but it truly gets bad at the end of the story. They decide to take it because Jacob is a huge fan of games with drugs, violence, blood, shooting, and plenty of swearing. And like the cashier, remember that.

Also, Jacob resorts to calling the cashier a "whiny baby" because that's totally what a fully-grown adult would say. Again with the actions of a character, you also need to keep them realistic with their age in mind too. Acting like one fourth of your age and calling everybody whiny babies is not realistic in the slightest for a functioning adult.

Once taking it home and after a few pointless scenes and poor language skills, Jacob decides to play the game while their parents are at work. Which, first of all considering their age shouldn't they have a job as well? Also, I would bring up the fact that Jacob, a 21-year-old is still casually living with his parents, but I'm sure he's the kind of person who would park in their mother's basement for 30 years anyway.

As they play the game, of course, they stumble upon the usual clichés of a haunted game story, excessive gore just for the sake of having it and in order to shock it's audience, as well as the inclusion of fourth-wall breaking that never really goes anywhere, all it really says is just "WELCOME TO HELL!" Which I'd like to point out, the blood and profanity start scaring the older brother, despite the fact that he just said that he loved games with blood and especially excessive swearing not too long ago.

Like, if you want to at least get something right in your story, the least you could do is keep the character's interests consistent, it's not hard. Also, he is immediately starting to love the game that he's playing, but as soon as he sees an "Enter Hell" option he immediately starts flipping his shit, maybe not as much as the main protagonist of Roblox: ? but still very unrealistically. Besides, it never specified that they couldn't choose the "Enter Hell" option, yet they decide to just do it anyways in order to add how completely moronic these two protagonists are.

Once they do, more clichés start to happen such as characters breaking the fourth wall by talking to the ones playing the game, skies turning into a pitch-black darkness, the music is a sped-up version of a game that has no reason to be incorporated whatsoever (Endless Staircase from Super Mario 64), and it starts raining blood. I don't mean that metaphorically either, the story actually has the game start to rain blood as the race begins.

Also, the two characters feel the Endless Staircase theme get loud enough to the point where they put on their earplugs, which they just conveniently have on hand. I mean if it was a computer game then it could make sense because they'd actually be using them, but why would they have earplugs on them when playing a Wii game? I may just be looking too deep into things, but the story is just so nonsensical and lazy that it's hard not to spot every single little thing that's clearly just getting ass-pulled into the roller coaster of a plot.

Once racing, the two are immediately able to find stuff like a mess of body parts and broken car parts in order to add to the number of times that the reader has pounded their face into the wall, before the music changes to a distorted version of the Main Menu theme and they lose control of Mario. Like, honestly was this supposed to be a challenge to incorporate as many video game creepypasta clichés as possible? That was what I thought when I first read it, but, no. By the looks of it, it was very well trying to be serious.

After they lose control of Mario, the two characters hear a "satanic voice" screaming from the game, before the Mario from the box art appears. Afterward, it cuts to the ending scene of the Grand Prix, where Mario is on top of a cliff on his Wild Wing. Before he drives off the cliff and crashes into the ground below, for, no reason other than to shock. And if you think I am repeating myself, well yes I am, but that's only because the story is doing the exact same thing.

Once it gets to showing the characters from the Mario universe getting killed by a shadowy figure, and that's when Jacob decides that he has had enough (Which I'd assume that it's because he suffers from Blood Whistle syndrome and thinks that all of them are real sentient beings) and starts smashing... the Wii console. See, they could've just removed the disc. They did say that the power buttons for the console and TV weren't working, but they never said the eject button didn't. But then again, I'm just using my brain, and with most haunted game stories the main protagonist(s) are forbidden from doing that.

But anywho, as soon as Jacob gets his baseball ball, which again just conveniently pops into existence, and starts bashing the console into several bits and pieces all over the floor, they think they've escaped. But of course, it's revealed that Mario is the shadowy figure, and he says one of the worst lines I've ever heard in a creepypasta ever.

“NOW SAY HELLO TO ‘SUICIDE’ AND ‘MURDER!!!”

First of all, using suicide in this context makes no god damn sense. Plus for anyone who has gone through suicidal tenancies himself or from his friends/family, they could get a bad taste in their mouth at best, and completely offended at worst. I mean, that can be true with anything, but it is still a big issue. Also, I hate to bring up this point but, it also doesn't make sense logically, suicide is where someone takes their own life. Not somebody making them. Somebody making them kill themselves is a homicide.

I'm probably looking way too deep into this, I know, but it's hard not to look over when a sentence just crams in so much wrong in a single sentence. Also, again, making the antagonist type in all caps and with tons of exclamation points does not make them any more intimidating. If anything it does the polar opposite of what you want it to do. Like, say for example if I just said "MWAHAHAHAHA!! I'M EVIL AND SHIT!!!" It's not scary, it's not intimidating, it's not even funny. It's just plain unintelligent writing at its finest.

And then we get to the ending, where Sarah jumps out of the window because Mario managed to get out of the television and Jacob just stands there like the idiot he is, before getting killed off. Which is just completely anticlimactic, as Mario just goes back to trying to catch Sarah. As soon as that happens we get what cements this on the list.

Sarah ends up hiding in the same Gamestop that she and Jacob got the game from, and coincidentally enough the same cashier is there too. When she asks him about the game, well, I'll just let the story explain it for me. I just cannot explain this without getting a headache.

“Because…..I played it before with a couple a friends, BUT IT WAS PRETTY DAMN TERRIBLE THAT IT TOOK MY FRIENDS!"

...

Are you kidding me!?

If it so terrible that it kills people then why is it still on store shelves!? And this doesn't even have anything to do with just these two's experiences with the game being special snowflakes, as in the next few sentences there are people screaming and fleeing the Gamestop, because as the cashier states, "They all played Mario Kart Black too and they all lost family members and friends when they played it. Such a terrifying game."

Okay, two things. If their family members did die by the game, why hasn't that Gamestop been sued for manslaughter charges by now? And secondly, why are they even there!? If one of my relatives was killed by a game I got from there, I wouldn't go anywhere near that place with the exception of a legal battle for, again, manslaughter charges.

There's just so much logic missing that there was no way I couldn't put this on the list. And, author, I do mean no offense when I say this, as I said at the start I'm not going after any of the writers of these stories (And before you ask, for Roblox: ? I was referring to the author as the protagonist, not the author as the, well, author of that story) but with that said, please do research next time you write a creepypasta. Because you don't want to end up like Mario Kart Black a second time.

Hell, not even the wiki where I first read this story, the Creepypasta Admin Training wiki cared about it. Seeing as how it is continuously vandalized most of the time nobody really cared. And with the quality of the story, including the plot-twist, it's really not hard to see why that's the case.

4.

Sonic.exe/Round 2 - X And Sonic.exe Are The Same Guy

I bet you may be wondering, "Hey HG, didn't you say earlier that you weren't gonna allow more than 1 of the plot-twists that Hoodo put on his list?" Well yes,  yes I did. But that was with both the story and the same plot-twist. Using a different plot-twist but the same story will still qualify, besides there's plenty of different "plot-twists" in this story to choose from. Now, while I have been able to summarize most of these stories in rather good detail. But let's be honest, if I did that here it would take up 80% of this blog. Mostly because of how ridiculously long this story is compared to all the rest. If anything, this story deserves its own review.

But with that said, for those who haven't seen this story before. It revolves around the journal of Derek Green, who is the quote unquote "Best detective on the Sonic.exe investigation." Which is very clearly complete bullshit not too far into the story, as it takes him months for him to realize that the Sonic.exe game has something to do with the killings.

But with that aside, it details Derek and his sister Chelsea's investigations into the deaths caused by the Sonic.exe games, or at the very least "deaths", due to some still being alive and others in comas, yet the story never specifies which ones are which. But on the side, there's the beginning of a cult that worships a figure called "X."

Now, I'm sure most of us are able to deduce that X and Sonic.exe are the exact same person solely by their names. I mean, it's not even subtle. If you're going to have a mystery in your creepypasta, putting an image similar to the one above is practically a death wish, as it links X and Sonic.exe immediately. Not to mention, well, picture it like "Sonic.eXe." I mean, even the worst of Scooby-Doo episodes have better mysteries than this. 

If anything this creepypasta feels like more of a Scooby-Doo episode except replace all of the main characters with idiots who don't know what they're doing. You do not want a mystery like that. I do know that mysteries are hard to write, but at least have a friend proofread your story for you, and tell you if anything is borderline obvious.

But guess what, Derek has no idea that X is even involved in the case at first, and it takes him a while to even think that X is responsible, let alone X being Sonic.exe. In fact, it takes much longer into the story to the point where all of your interest is gone, your brain cells are hurting, and you just want the entire thing to end when he figures out that X is Sonic.exe.

And it's not even Derek that figures this out for himself, it takes some talking with someone on Skype named Cole, which is someone he shouldn't be fully trusting in the first place, where Cole tells him that X is Sonic.exe.

I think you can see why I'm hoping to give this creepypasta its own separate review because holy hell this one is painful to read and even more painful to talk about. But when it comes to its plot twists, while it may not be just as bad as the story in question. It's still more than capable of obliterating most of the other terrible plot twists on this list. But those who know me well enough may be surprised that this is only Number 4 on this list, considering you all probably know how much I despise this creepypasta.

Well, yes I really do despise this creepypasta. But when it comes to plot twists, there's worse. There's always ones that are worse.

Until we meet again, Sonic.exe.

3.

It Will Get Worse - Mr. Blood Shine

This was easily the most difficult segment to write, even more than Sonic.exe/Round 2 was. For those of you that haven't heard of this creepypasta, they may be wondering why. The reason is, this creepypasta is so bad it barely speaks coherent English. It just seems to shift around a bunch of nonsensical words and phrases until it is completely unrecognizable to anyone who has some knowledge of how writing works.

But from what I was able to gather from it, this "story" (I use that term very loosely) revolves around our author who is really bored, and is about to go to his room to sleep, because the only two games he has is a few Call of Duty games and Tekken Tag Tournament. I'm sure I don't even need to point out how faulty that sentence is because I'm sure you deduced why it was in the instant you read it. He goes to his room to sleep, until he finds his Mario plushie that reminds him he has a Gamecube in the attic.

He immediately decides that he should go up to the attic to get the Gamecube, once there he finds many games, that includes Super Mario Sunshine. Immediately afterward, he exits the attic and connects his Gamecube to the TV and inserts the Super Mario Sunshine disc. And then he, and I quote, "ran into the box" to dig out the Memory Card. You don't run into a box in order to get a memory card unless you want to smash your head on one of the items in there and get a minor concussion. If you said "I ran over to the box" it would make a lot more sense, but if I continued to criticize the grammar of this story we'd be here all day.

However, once the game starts it immediately acts unusual, as once he tries to move Mario he immediately gets a 'GAME OVER' screen. Now, there is another problem with gaming creepypastas that most writers don't seem to get. You have to build it up first. The reason why Ben Drowned and NES Godzilla worked was because they were slowly getting more and more fucked up. They weren't just starting out and blood just spouts everywhere while characters kill each other, they started out somewhat normally before going absolutely absurd.

With that said, the author tries to turn off the console before text pops up on the screen saying "Do not turn you will regret it!" Which might as well be just as bad of a cliché as ending your creepypasta off with "YOU'RE NEXT!" Mostly because getting told not to look behind you is only scary when you're around 6-7 years old. Once you grow out of that age, it just becomes laughable or painful. Sometimes both depending on the execution.

He attempts to turn off the console but the game doesn't turn off, as Mario immediately starts strangling Peach while staring through the screen and at the author, before the screen abruptly cuts to black. The next line can only be seen to believed, in fact, I can barely describe it in detail myself without laughing like crazy.

"I could not move I was frozen with fear and shock. after five minutes, I was able to touch me,"

After five minutes, I was able to touch me. I'm sure if it wasn't for this line I wouldn't know about this creepypasta because all I've found in the comments were the user's reactions to that quote. And to be honest I can see why, the fact that this was put in a creepypasta that was attempting to be scary, let alone trying to be serious, makes it all the more humorous. If anything it just makes the protagonist seem like he's saying in his mind "Oh shit, oh shit this is creeping me out, what do I--Oh yeah I remember, when I'm getting crept out I should jack off to feel better!"

Maybe I'm just over-analyzing this story, but even so, I can't help but let these thoughts come to mind when I see this.

After the author takes a shower he heads back to the room that he has his TV in, only to spot Yoshi "rolling over and vomiting up a yellow-and-red pine." Which, I got agree with Jacob from Bad Creepypasta, as it makes me think of Yoshi just vomiting up a pine tree. He then checks his bed after the game shows it as if there was a camera projecting onto the screen from his bedroom. Once the author searches around, he finds his Mario toy with a demonic smile.

Several of the reader's painful Sonic.exe flashbacks later, the author immediately throws the Mario toy and the Super Mario Sunshine game into the woods, as he claims that there was a figure in a red hat and red clothes watching him as he tosses them away. The next day at 12 he is awoken by the doorbell ringing, and this is when the plot-twist hits us after a bunch of failed English sentences.

It turns out that the game wasn't Super Mario Sunshine at all, instead, it was "Mr. Blood Shine" as it was packaged with the Mario plushie that he had just tossed away. And then he finds a note that says "What what we said it will get worse!" I honestly didn't know if this qualified as a plot-twist at first, considering it was pretty clear from the very beginning that this wasn't Super Mario Sunshine, but it does seem like it's trying to be a plot-twist, as it is supposed to be the "unexpected turn."

But it does not do a good job at it in the slightest, not only did we already know that this wasn't Super Mario Sunshine, but it doesn't explain the purpose behind the game other than to "scare" the reader. With gaming creepypastas, it takes more than a few occurrences from a game that goes nowhere in order to disturb the audience. And I'm sure that even if this story was speaking proper English, it wouldn't matter because it will most likely remain to keep its spot on the list.

2.

Frozen Lost Clip - Hyper-Realistic Olaf

Oh yes, anyone who knows when I first read this story also should know that this was gonna make it on this list. Fun fact, this was the first candidate I thought of once the idea came to mind. Thankfully this story is a rather short one, but it is written so poorly that it makes the reader question why they are even living on this planet.

It starts out with our author, who is probably the most stereotypical fan of Frozen in the history of its release, as she has a collection of Frozen toys and has the movie on DVD. She might as well have a Frozen backpack, Frozen posters, Frozen bootleg games, everything must have Frozen involved or it's nothing to me! Jokes aside, he mentions he is no longer a fan of Frozen after what he has experienced.

He discovers that there was a deleted scene that Disney did not allow to be released. Yet he just manages to find it in the regular playing of the movie, because logic is definitely not important for our creepypasta! After watching for a little while it cuts to static before it shoves in a bunch of pointless violence because of course, it does, all lost episodes need to have that after all. All the author can see is blood all over the ice castle, and Elsa disembodied.

The author, and I quote, "had a shocked look on myself" before continuing to watch. He than sees Anna crying for a long time, and just when he starts to get bored from all the crying, she grabs Elsa's head and buries it to hide the evidence and kills everyone in the town just incase. Wouldn't that cause the polar opposite of keeping everybody quiet about it? Instead, the entire killing of a town would just get headlined all over the news. 

By that point Anna has blood all over her, once again making it very clear that it wouldn't hide any evidence whatsoever, and has the residents' entrails scattered everywhere because this is one of the edgiest stories to ever exist. You'll see why it is the edgiest story once the ending rolls around. But I suppose hiding the evidence and whatnot is pointless anyways because Olaf sees this and gets a chainsaw, ripping Anna to shreds. Because a snowman wielding a chainsaw is the most threatening concept I've ever heard and does not want me to put both palms of my hands over my face and smash my head into the desk.

The movie then cuts to static once Olaf is the last remaining of the bunch before it cuts back to regular Frozen, which would make the entire thing pointless. Until we get the reaction from the author. Apparently, he is so disgusted, so angry, so completely enraged that he grabs a baseball bat and breaks his TV. He also throws away everything related to Frozen in the trash.

AND THEN THE AUTHOR CUTS HIS OWN ARM OFF.

Not only does that make it seem like the author is the root that Shadow the Hedgehog spawned from, but there is literally no reason for the author to cut his own arm off. In fact, how does he cut his own arm off? If he was still using the baseball bat, you can't cut anything with it. Let alone be able to sever a limb no matter how strong you are. But that's not even getting to the best part.

For no reason whatsoever, an image is displayed on the TV despite it being broken. And it shows a hyper-realistic Olaf. And before you ask, no, that image I used for this segment was not one I just randomly found. This was used in the story. That image isn't in any way, shape, or form scary. It is far more likely to make you burst into laughter upon seeing it due to how it looks. And then the author just dies right after, making the entire thing pointless.

Plus, considering this is written in the first-person perspective. There is no explanation as to how he was able to write the damn story. Even Roblox: ? and Terraria: The Stone Pentagram managed to pull off excuses. Very bullshit excuses, but still excuses all the same. Here, though? There is none, none whatsoever. And you should never end your creepypasta on "I'm dead" no matter the circumstances. It just comes off as completely illogical. If you're going to have someone die in your story, let alone the main character, it's best to keep it third-person.

Because needless to say, you never want your creepypasta ending up like this travesty.

Now, before we get to the Number 1 worst creepypasta plot-twist from what I've read. Let's take a look at some dishonorable mentions.

Dishonorable Mentions

Super Mario: The Haunted Save - I'm A Boo

Going right back to both Mario creepypastas and plot-twists that ultimately result in the main character's death, despite the fact that it's a first-person story. Revolving around the cliché of a bootlegged game that he got from an eAuction, this one being Super Mario World. And once getting it he notices that the title is UERMRD. Which he deduces to be scrambled text for "MURDER."

Once actually playing the game he stumbles upon a small red hill with a dark red pipe, and once going down it, he stumbles upon Bowser. Who I kid you not, pulls out a Portal Gun and kills the author. Afterward, it ends with this quote: "To this day, I am a boo, guarding Bowser Castle. My home is in the 9th room. If any explorer finds my diary, share my story with the world."

Now this sounds like perfect material for this list, right? Well, no. From what I've heard of this story, despite it being posted to the creepypasta website back in 2012, it is, in fact, a trollpasta. And once you hear that you can kind of tell because of the writing. It may not be a good one, as it doesn't provide enough jokes besides ones that other trollpastas do much better like I HATE YOU for example. But I said, in the beginning, I wasn't including trollpastas, no matter if they were funny or not, so I left this off the list.

The Princess Is Not In Another Castle - My Parents Are Dead

You'd be surprised at how many Mario creepypastas were considered for this list. This shows our author looking through Super Mario Bros. ROMs before he stumbles upon one that states "Download at your own risk." With our author being as smart as he is he downloads it, and it immediately starts up with some "disturbing" content because as I said before, it falls under the category of no building up whatsoever.

After that and a bunch of failed English, the author stumbles upon Browser. Yes, they spell Bowser as if he was Firefox. But he was killed, and soon after the game starts breaking the fourth wall and his door is locked as it shows him a bunch of images that are too tasteless to talk about. But it's one of those creepypastas that thinks "And then blood" will scare the audience.

He tries to call his parents, but instead he gets the police, as they tell him that they got into an accident and didn't make it. Now this isn't the only time that parents dying is the ultimate twist of the story, it happened in Alex Melee. But this is the worst example, as it just comes out of nowhere (And not in a good way, either) and has no purpose except for shock. However, the rest were much worse. And I'm gonna be honest, I'm sure you're just as sick of these Mario creepypastas as I am.

WHO WAS PHONE? - Caller Is Dead

There was no way I could include this on the list, it's just a classic. Plus it falls under the so horrible that it's amazing category. It may be a terrible story, but it's a terrible story above all terrible stories, one that has spawned countless variations and even comics dedicated to it. And that's gotta be commended.

Disturbing Pokémon ROM - 9/11

If you were expecting a Pokémon story in the top 10, then I do apologize. Because unfortunately, this is the closest you've got. That's not saying that this story isn't bad, though, this once again revolves around the author losing his Pokémon Fire Red game, and ultimately decides to search for a ROM of it. After finding one and starting to play it, he moves Red to the bottom floor of his house. And as soon as he does, his mother orders him to watch the TV. I'll let the creepypasta explain what happens next.

"It has just been reported that the World Trade Center has been successfully attacked. Police were not able to save the people inside of the building. As of now, There are no recorded survivors."

I really have a distaste for stories that just use 9/11 as a method of shock and nothing else. I'm not gonna act like a Social Justice Warrior over it, but it does bother me. As there are better ways to shock the audience rather than shoving previous terrorist attacks down our throats. I am aware that Happy Appy did this as well, but at least with that story, there was some effort put into it. Here, though, the writer didn't care about it so much that he uploaded it unfinished as the story soon ends with "The mystery of this ROM continues."

Never write creepypastas unfinished by the way, it doesn't make it seem that much more ominous. It makes you look lazy. Ending it on say "It was at that moment, that he/she saw X looking at them, as it grinned with sharp teeth..." is much more understandable, as that helps bring atmosphere and is honestly better to end on than an overly graphic death scene. Why didn't this make the list? Well, truth be told it was supposed to. But then I read Mario Kart Black, and then it was squeezed out. But even so, consider this Number 11.

Hatsune DEATHku - Hatsune Miku is Satan

With a name like Hatsune DEATHku, I'm sure you are already puzzled as to how this didn't make the list. This story centers around the author heading to a Vocaloid concert, which just so happened to be in an abandoned building in the middle of the woods because that makes perfect sense, let alone the fact that it's yet another cliché.

After figuring out that there was no one but him in the concert, and that Hatsune Miku wasn't even there. The music immediately starts getting demonic, while the author starts investigating the abandoned concert hall. And he finds a lone computer with an image file titled "Hatsune DEATHku.jpg" Which of course, is an image of Hatsune DEATHku with black eyes and text saying "I AM SATAN."

Immediately afterward, the author finds his friend Gary dead with the same phrase engraved in his chest,  for no reason whatsoever. Now, I would say how bad this story is. But the worst part of all of this is that the author thought that this story was Pasta of the Month material. Now, I'm still abiding by my rule of not bashing the authors of the story. But this is, to be blunt, rather arrogant. And is honestly just asking for trouble.

I only included this as an honorable mention, because it's another example of a plot-twist that is just not terrible enough to make it among the worst I've read.

That Mii Was Mii - Tired Yet?

This kind of plot-twist is nothing new, in fact, I was considering Thomas and the Children for this list, where the author of the story out of nowhere finds out he caused his son's death when he wakes up. But then I ended up reading this, and I was just glad that it didn't end in one of the worst puns I've ever heard.

This story centers around someone who is playing his friend's 3DS and finds bizarre files on there. Such as a video that contains the suggested murder of two people that was in a party with them. And then he heads to the Mii Plaza, where he finds a Mii that is named "Tired Yet?" And this is when the usual breaking the 4th wall cliché rolls around. As he decided to try and change his name to "No" only for it to change to "Yes You Are."

After some banter that isn't scary nor is it so bad it's funny, out of nowhere he is told that he should "Check the mirror." Where it shows that he was not only responsible for the murder of the two people from earlier, but also because of his friends. Due to all of the blood that he somehow didn't see on him when playing on the 3DS, and him being identical to the Mii displayed... Which he says in the pun you see on the title.

Never make puns with your creepypasta unless you don't want your readers to take you seriously. But I'm sure most of you reading this don't need me to tell you that, or at least I hope not. This may not be as bad enough to make it among the worst, but it's easily either number 11-12.

But with that said, it's on to the absolute worst from what I've read. And I actually had to look very deep to find this, but once I did, I knew it had to be number 1. Without further delay, I shall let this monster loose.

1.

Sesame street the lost episodes - "MADE BY SATAN"

Yes, the bottom two worst are in the lost episode subgenre, But if I'm gonna be honest it's difficult to consider this even a story, let alone a creepypasta or a lost episode creepypasta. I mean, I honestly thought that Frozen Lost Clip or It Will Get Worse would absolutely obliterate the rest of the competition. But, no. It seems like it was not the case after all. Because as I said in the Tired Yet? segment, I knew that this had to be in the top spot once I finished reading it.

Needless to say, I doubt you are prepared for this creepypasta, hell even I'm not prepared to go through it, but I'm sure you'll have the exact same reaction as me.

So the "plot" centers around a hardcore Sesame Street fan who had every single episode of the iconic kids show that he could get his hands on, but he "have always wanted something more" so he want to websites, stores, and rentals to see if he could find any remaining episodes, but to no avail. After a little while of searching, a somebody from Fort Collins, Colorado called him, saying that he had some rare Sesame Street episodes.

I would make a comment about the spelling here, but if I'm gonna be brutally honest I'd have to do that twice per paragraph. And all I'd be able to say each time, or at least for most of them is that you really, really need to proofread. Once the man gets to Fort Collins in order to pick up the tapes, he is given an ominous warning by the previous owner. "Never ever open these tapes to anybody even yourself," as his brother and his son committed suicide after watching it.

Yes, committed suicide over watching a very spooky Sesame Street episode, look even if you were a hardcore Sesame Street fan you'd never kill yourself due to seeing a bizarre rendition of the show. Otherwise, I'm sure you wouldn't last a second on the internet, with all of the Killer Elmo memes back in 2009 and so on. Also, the reaction from the author doesn't use closed quotation marks, so it makes it seem like he's saying the rest of the story.

In true creepypasta protagonist fashion, the author just doesn't care and decides to bring the tapes home with him anyways (Next thing I know he'd just consider the scenes that caused the original owner's brother and his son's suicide a glitch) before arriving at his home. And then he drinks some beer.

Look, I'm not gonna judge what someone is into when it comes to entertainment, but there's no hardcore Sesame Street fan who is old enough to drink beer, I don't care who you are. If anything they're only old enough to pass out once taking a single shot. But after drinking, he decides to open up his VCR and watch the tapes.

It starts out as expected with the Sesame Street intro, but then for a split second there's a picture of a guy that was telling him but he forget to mention that next to them were people with devilish marks. Which makes perfect sense. They then started carving Big Bird's yellow body with some that looks like this "DEATH IS LIFE". But the rest of the episode was episode 1200. Which, I suppose is meant to be, normal? I suppose you do have to be a hardcore Sesame Street fan to read this, or else, you'd be completely lost.

Once the author gets to the ending the theme was slower and had some "unfriendly giggles" it it had a green Grover and a blue Kermit holding up the CTW sign that had a engraving 666 on it. Okay, ignoring the grammar as I said earlier, no creepypasta should use 666. It's done to death and it just makes the reader laugh at you. He look at the credits but instead of Jim Henson as writer it just said 4654651648. Which just looks like the writer was just typing up numbers blindly on his calculator.

But at the end of the credits instead of that PBS logo it just have a head of a human. But there was a other episode of Sesame Street while the author was thinking what the fuck. The second episode began as a very slowly sang Sesame Street theme with children playing in red filters. It started out with the children moping around until someone driving in a 1950 Chevrolet appears and says "Hey kids! went to help clan up this car!" Because using a question mark for an actual question is for wankers.

After that, it cuts to a seance with Bert and Ernie they are telling how to spell and say words. Presumably, they are trying to teach the story this, which would make sense with the seance because this story's logic died upon the title. But then the letters they were spelling were "DEATH" then a red monster puppet ripping of Erine's head and there was blood all over the place. Then Bert began crying but very painfully, I don't even know what the fuck that means. Before the monster ripped of Bert's head in the same way he ripped of Bert's.

Yes, the story put the same character twice.

It then cuts to Forgetful Jones just being forgetful then in the background a cow just makes a fire and after that, a random puppet just pushes him in the fire while he was scramming. Then after he was screaming the cow and the puppet ate him and they said "That's some nice cowboy BBQ" before going back to the street. The children and the guy was staring at the car then he says "Lets paint the car now!" And then a child said, "how are we going to paint the car without any pant?!" That, uh, that makes me really uncomfortable.

Then the guy says "With Blood!" then he grab him and began the stabbing and singing a song. The song want like this. "Oh killing and killing so fun it is the best of all. Makeing them scram is so mush fun just killing oh killing is lots of fun!" I swear, not even the Serial Killers from Town of Salem have such poor grammar.

And speaking of grammar, this is the point where the writer just, gives up. As the grammar just becomes inexcusable. As much as I wanna criticize the author for just shoving in the violence of minors for no reason other than shock in the story, but with the spelling stealing the show, I just can't do it.

The children attempt to flee but people with devilish masks, which of course has the same description as the ones earlier in the story, before they caching them and killing theme. This caused the author get a chill in his spine. Then after a full five mintaes of screaming the guy said to the remaining children "Now we have some paint". And then it goes to more disgusting territory that I won't say here, but it does cause the author to pause and vomit.

After that very disgusting seane, it cuts to Big Bird, who is somehow still alive after his body was carved into in the previous episode. He is crying while he watches this, as he is in... China. What does this creepypasta have to do with China?! What does this creepypasta have to do with anything?!

After he was crying he slammed his bridseed milkshake to the floor and said: "Fuck China, I am going to get a plane ticket and save the children". Which makes me think that Big Bird has gotten the Frozen Lost Clip treatment and gotten completely edgy. Back to the unknown murderer, with the mask telling how to kill people. The person in question is a blond child. Frist, the man told her "Where you mommy". I, I'm fucking losing my mind here.

She said, "Leave me alone!" Then the murderer says "Wow what the girl with some temperament. Good thing that wont be long." As soon as that is said the story immediately goes back to being distasteful and as a result, I won't say what happens next, because I'm sure you don't want to vomit in your mouth like I did. But don't worry, it goes right back to being ridiculous. Even more ridiculous than before.

Big Bird pops out of nowhere. No, that's not me describing the story shoving him in front of the unknown killer, the story literally says that he pops out of nowhere. He said, "Where the Children!" Then the unknown killer says "You have to get me first!" And then, I shit you not, THEY BEGAN FIGHTING WHILE THE ROCKY THEME WAS PLAYING!

BIG BIRD, FIGHTING A MASKED KILLER, WHILE GOTTA FLY NOW IS PLAYING IN THE BACKGROUND. AND THE AUTHOR IS TRYING TO MAKE THIS A SERIOUS CREEPYPASTA.

Even after reading this I have a hard time believing that this actually exists. But, it does. The fighting was bloody and gory, and it stopped when Big Bird picks up the guy and threws him down.  The music stops, and the guy picks himself off, he had no skin just a face and screamed this "DEATH IS LIFE!!!!!" I would say that I am having flashbacks to Roblox: ?. But I feel more like I'm having a flashback to Vietnam right now.

The unknown killer then rips Big Bird's head off, and the children wore in utter SOCK!

Utter. 

Sock. 

I, I don't even know what to say about this. I just don't know how one can miss this, even if they aren't proofreading they should still be able to see this in plain sight while they write this. The end music then started to play and it, of course, went to another distasteful scene that I won't get into because this actually made me want to vomit. I'm not even exaggerating, I really wanted to.

And then when it all finished off, he said: "Sesame Street is made from..." Before it cuts to a picture of Satan saying "MADE BY SATAN" and then the tape ends. And after such a horrifying scene, the author has had enough and smashed the tapes with a sledgehammer. And gives us these very wise, influential, and totally not groan-worthy words to end this off.

"My advise to you if you ever see that episode then

Destory It!!!!"

I'm, not going to lie it's really hard to just talk about the plot twist alone. Because the entire story just truly steals the show. The grammar is, it's honestly unmatched in terms of storytelling. The plot makes absolutely no sense whatsoever. The content is completely distasteful and follows under the "gory is scary" trope. And of course, that fucking fight scene. No creepypasta has made me facepalm as hard as this one. Hell, it drones on for so long it's not even so bad it's good. It's so bad it's fucking atrocious. Hell, even the format is shit. Most of it is all just one massive wall of text, plus the title isn't even properly capitalized

But ironically enough, if you do have any plans of writing a creepypasta in the future. I, bizarrely recommend you give this a read. It is the perfect example of how not to write one, as it has almost everything that could go wrong when writing. As for me, is this the worst creepypasta I've read? Well, in terms of content no. But when it comes to a technical writing aspect, it very well could. I still stand by meaning no offense to the author of this story, but I do feel like you should take some writing classes if this is what you wanna do later in life.

This has been HG, and as a last request. If any of you from the Trollpasta Wiki is reading this, consider Sesame street the lost episodes as an entry for the FoTM.

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Hey guys, thanks for reading until the very end! Trust me, this was a long blog to write, and it was most likely a long one for you guys to read too. Feel free to leave your thoughts in the comments below, as this is my start as a creepypasta critic and I hope to improve sometime in the future. If you've got any suggestions for stories I should review, or a future Top 10, you can also leave those in the comments.

Keep writing everyone!

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http://badcreepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Terraria:_The_Stone_Pentagram
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http://trollpasta.wikia.com/wiki/It_Will_Get_Worse
http://trollpasta.wikia.com/wiki/Frozen_Lost_Clip
http://www.creepypasta.com/super-mario-the-haunted-save/
http://trollpasta.wikia.com/wiki/The_Princess_Is_Not_In_Another_Castle
http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/WHO_WAS_PHONE%3F
http://trollpasta.wikia.com/wiki/Disturbing_Pok%C3%A9mon_ROM
http://trollpasta.wikia.com/wiki/Hatsune_DEATHku
http://trollpasta.wikia.com/wiki/Tired_Yet%3F
http://trollpasta.wikia.com/wiki/Sesame_street_the_lost_episodes